The Cassopolis Outpost Review

[WorldisQuiet5256]

This is where I would like you guys opinion about what I have posted so far.
If you hate, and want to post hate, that is okay with me.

Any thoughts about parts you like, parts need fixing.
More Eyes = More Minds.

The More the Merrier.

[terein]

is it basically just story you're writing?

[WorldisQuiet5256]

Yes.
All I ask is your thoughts on it so far.
I just didn't want to spam the main thread I am using to post it.

[The Abacus]

Do want critique solely about the plot, or also the writing and orthography?

[WorldisQuiet5256]

What your opinion is about it.

What you think the weak points are.
(And how you think what would improve it.)

What you think the Strong points are.
I am trying to get a better mind set on how to write it.

[Vurn]

Wow, so, like, the orthography kinda sucks.

[ENIHCAMBUS]

The same Vurn of always.

[The Abacus]

What your opinion is about it.

What you think the weak points are.
(And how you think what would improve it.)

What you think the Strong points are.
I am trying to get a better mind set on how to write it.

Well, you could improve the story substantially by proofreading it (there are a few oddly-worded sentences and occasional grammar mistakes) revising it, using better words and adding more variety to sentence structure. (What's your first language? If it's English then I think you should have been able to have spotted these )

[WorldisQuiet5256]

It is English.
I hate the English language.
Irony if you ask me.

I have gone over it.
(Note to self: Go over it twice.)
Thank you, I needed review from someone who was not a family member.
The Family relationship variable is out the the equation in this case.

Again, thank you.

[terein]

It is English.
I hate the English language

me too. but then again, i like it because i hate it so much

Thank you, I needed review from someone who was not a family member.

yes

when is there going to be more? i want there to be more

(i'm working on a critique. let me sleep on it.)