A' L L U K I N - forum story discussion - by (- ak -)

[The Kakama]

Well then. As of today, we have entered the third month of A'llukin. Time to break out those avatars, I guess.

I thought that we would wait until chapter 6 is done and we can play again, before we use the avatars.

Just curious, in the image with all the characters cloging up the screen, there is an arachnid being, is it Ka-Ley? Or an unknown character? Because as far I remember Ka-Ley was there with Maddox and Ener.

I don't know, I thought that it was Ka-Ley, since she's also an engineer and could hack into the screen.

[Sublevel 114]

Just curious, in the image with all the characters cloging up the screen, there is an arachnid being, is it Ka-Ley? Or an unknown character? Because as far I remember Ka-Ley was there with Maddox and Ener.

Awesome find.

[The Abacus]

At this steps it seems AK will complete to repost all A'llukin chapters before Sub9 gets released.

Nah, I think Mateusz would finish Sub_9 first.

Chapter 5 and 6 are individually much, much longer than Chapter 4.

Unless Sub 9's progress development increases at a rate of 10% per day, I have my doubts.

[- ak -]

At this steps it seems AK will complete to repost all A'llukin chapters before Sub9 gets released.

Nah, I think Mateusz would finish Sub_9 first.

Chapter 5 and 6 are individually much, much longer than Chapter 4.

Unless Sub 9's progress development increases at a rate of 10% per day, I have my doubts.

It seems that I have lost my own bet xD

Just curious, in the image with all the characters cloging up the screen, there is an arachnid being, is it Ka-Ley? Or an unknown character? Because as far I remember Ka-Ley was there with Maddox and Ener.

Awesome find.

That's a different spider :3 Ka-Ley doesn't have an electronic device with, so she couldn't do live web communication (pun!) and perform hack either.

[Ancient Crystal]

Well then. As of today, we have entered the third month of A'llukin. Time to break out those avatars, I guess.

I thought that we would wait until chapter 6 is done and we can play again, before we use the avatars.

Wait... will the story be resumed when everything is posted?

[- ak -]

Well then. As of today, we have entered the third month of A'llukin. Time to break out those avatars, I guess.

I thought that we would wait until chapter 6 is done and we can play again, before we use the avatars.

Wait... will the story be resumed when everything is posted?

Not right away, but sometime after that.

That way, most people here would know what to expect during Chapter 7.

[Ancient Crystal]

By "not right away", do you mean "back to the usual buisniess of 'as soon as I have time' "or some thing more concrete, kind of "the end is in sight"?

[- ak -]

By "not right away", do you mean "back to the usual buisniess of 'as soon as I have time' "or some thing more concrete, kind of "the end is in sight"?

Somewhere in between

EDIT: when I were to return, I believe the updates will be bit slower than usual though they will be more mellow like Chapter 1-5. Chapter 6 was very slow over the course of several weeks because it is very plot-intense and action-packed. Chapter 7 and beyond will returns to slower-paced puzzle-solving adventure until the finale. Its because I will have less time to work on this story.

EDIT2: well, I have finally finished archiving all of Chapters here on the forum all that remains is to finish Chapter 7... whenever I am ready to resume the story.

Also, I will be posting some of my development reports that I managed to save from the old forum. They're made after I finished each Chapters, so there are six entries detailing my thoughts and processes on developing the story, characters, and the ongoing mystique. I will be posting all of the six entries here on this forum story discussion.

Don't worry about accidentally posting between entries! They're just development reports for casual reading. Go ahead and post if you want

[- ak -]

DEVELOPMENT OF CHAPTER 1 - the dim inception

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OOHH SKETCHES!



Let me tell a little story about the characters Ener and Maddox. The sketches you see of them are the FIRST SKETCHES I ever made of those characters, right out of my head. They looks so impossibly good that I just had to use the designs. Of course, Ener went through some major renovations from realistic and serious looking creature to a cute and adorable one :3 Of course, the other reason for that change was that the cuter version is easier to draw than the realistic one and that the cuter version can tug at your heart quite well

The second picture is the game sequence. It took me a while to decide on a gripping intro and to build off of that. That including what kind of character Ener will interact with (Maddox and Daniel, of course), what kind of environment he should be in (weird bunker places), and what kind of story that would be compelling to follow. Sure that waking up with amnesia is common, but it does make for some very interesting development. I faced the problem of how to get the reader involved since character developments might not be enough to push the story really far.

That is when I chose to use the strange yellow "middle of nowhere" as one of the more important element of the entire story right at the start. Compounding that with the twisted state of Daniel and you get a big WTFisgoingon that nicely start off the whole mystery. Using that huge of the gap of "middle of nowhere" as a plot element allows me to fill in the blanks nicely in the upcoming chapters, which I hope will continues to be epic-worthy :3

I will be posting some neat sketches and developments after each chapter so you can see my thought process <3 the next chapter will starts sometime next week, so I can plan out the story and progress with the time I have while you guys can take a seat and relax and do whatever you want (maybe Pastel Adventure RPG story can't hurt to have more story from someone else!)

[- ak -]

DEVELOPMENT OF CHAPTER 2 - of yawning void

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We all know what happened to Daniel and found out that we're stuck in the weird void. After the tense intro with Daniel being all twisty and bendy, it certainly left some impression. The chapter is puzzle-heavy throughout, although there are some plot expositions. That's where Elouf, Quall, and Doctor Dodd come into play. Maddox said that Kelen and Wooli are unfriendly and Daniel reinforce that idea. So I need to include some animal friends to lighten up the atmosphere and have them killed off by Doctor Dodd to raise the stake completely, leaving the rest of story up in the air.

What other dangers could lurk just around the corner?

I learned a lot from 2nd chapter about puzzles. Apparently, a lot of people missed one important item, even when I gave a lot of hints. Perhaps the problem is that it blended bit too much into background. At least I improvised the situation, blaming on the characters instead XD It a good thing that I always planned on having the second chapter to be puzzle-heavy with little of plot (except for the end). You can expect more puzzles in the next several chapters, but they will be somewhat easier and well integrated into the plot so they shouldn't be difficult and well hidden.

and here my sketches of second chapter









and the two awful digital sketches of Ener when he first wake up in the locker. Those are the very first digital drawing I did of any characters in the story.

The first one was attempted with a MOUSE. You can see how crappy it was XD no consistent anatomy and he looks far more shaggy and un-cute than I wanted. Being overly realistic ironically made it less realistic xD



I had to admit that the way I drew him with a mouse turned me away from ever developing the story, so I kinda abandoned it somewhere back then. There was no way I can do the story justice without character that you can connect to not just to his behaviors and attitudes, but also his appearance. If he's ugly, then the story will fall apart just because he looks "bad."

Then my fortune came after Christmas when I didn't want certain gifts. I exchanged them for the new Wacom Tablet that I have now. After just a few stroke of practice, the digital drawing suddenly became natural and free to my soul. I knew that I had to return and attempt Ener in the locker again to see if I can draw just as well in digital form just like I can do with pen and paper. This is the result, the second sketch you can see below. It a vast improvement over the first sketch, but the anatomy is still off, especially with the lower body. The lower half, joints, hinds, and tail all seems really off. Also, the mouth didn't seems right with the type of head that Ener have, making him looks bit more like a rabbit than a canine being.



I liked the general structure of the body, so I took it and polish up the flaws. That's when I made a better anatomy system, giving Ener his well-deserved curves and joints, making him more of living creature than a bad drawing. Also, the mouth fits much better with the snout, making him more of canine being than a rabbit.

I finally settled on the improved version as seen from Chapter 1.



That's all for second chapter development sketches