Pastel Land Comic Discussion

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Evil twin, oohh!

Make me into someone who love having fun being evil

[ENIHCAMBUS]

I would had responded, but they're several light and water issues here in my neighbourhood. I now can't enter forum and post anytime.

I never thought of having an evil twin. The fact that I chosen Submachine backwards doesn't makes Submachine my evil twin.

AK@: You evil twin should be KA, he uses a "Ford Ka" to run over people!

[Vortex]

I never thought of having an evil twin. The fact that I chosen Submachine backwards doesn't makes Submachine my evil twin.

what about rennacS? or Printer?

[Sublevel 114]

Submachine and submachinE are different guys.
:P

kcolluoS sounds better.
:D

levelbuS is evil twin of my exploding karma bunny form. retraC is evil twin of my human form.
retraC created levelbuS after he tried to absorb light bunny

don't forget full name: Matuesz Skutul

Bender has 10 evil twins:
http://www.pastelland.com/forum/viewtop ... 148#p63112

[ENIHCAMBUS]

I never thought of having an evil twin. The fact that I chosen Submachine backwards doesn't makes Submachine my evil twin.

what about rennacS? or Printer?

What about ANTICAMBUS?

[Sublevel 114]

Lovebus is your true evil twin

[ENIHCAMBUS]

Nah, I myself is lovable, cute and sweet. My evil twin should be all the contrary to that.

[Sublevel 114]

but... Lovebus has girlfriends...

[Anonymous2]

You know, I would do more of this, but at the same time I find this whole thing to be a window into how you see us (or more me, I suppose) and that is very interesting to me. I wouldn't want ruin the experiment.

I see... yes when I'm adding characters into groups, and adding their scripts in, I mimic their usual forum behavior which is in the very least how I see people here. Sublevel for example, super friendly, child like, and mischievous, but in a good way.

I would perhaps like to see more dialogue that is about character building and characters interacting. In the last comic my main problem was that almost all talking was either exposition or directly driving the story forward in leaps. I would've liked more room to see how you think these characters work together, you know?

Ok... more character development. Gotcha.

As a whole, the comic was good. You introduced a solid plot for a story of that length, and were able to work around the challenges of capturing the conversation with the space provided. There weren't any awkward gaps and the language was fluent.

Thanks

What I think could be improved/future ideas: You're doing a good job of handling many different viewpoints at once. Though I would sometimes like to see longer segments between two or more characters. I don't know how long those panels take to make, so if time is an issue, then it's not a problem. I know that I'm going to try to focus on different segment time lengths when my story comes out after Sub10 (but that'll be just text). Anyway, if you have time I would like to see more special graphical changes like the ones of the entrance of the Maiden, those were cool to visualize.

Yeah this comic will have a slightly different layout, especially when a character speaks more than once in the same scene.

Like...



Notice how the robot speaks in his own window? That's something I am working on. Its not so much about time, more about space, and also how many scenes this forum can hold, without the forum auto-zooming the page, in order to fit the images onto the screen. You can see that in the last comic in Chapter 5, when all characters are in the master unit near the ancient crystal (and yes Ancient Crystal that is you, if you were wondering) and the frames appear smaller, and so does the text. Still trying to figure out a solution to that...

Thank you for the detailed review.

[Anonymous2]

And here is a sample of what you will see with the new layout. Not spoiling much here lol.

About personality, well, obviously he's extremely evil and his dream is to dominate the world, also he's gay and likes to flirt with guys

Shame, Kore is straight. Flirt with guys? Oh Error...