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Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 01:51
by ENIHCAMBUS
Subception 4: The Blast Door

At Submachine

Sublevel: Yay! We did it, we awoke!
Kakama: And we're no longer onions! :P
Redafro: Yeah! Everything is ok now, and Vortex...
Kakama: What? How its posible, We reached the Core, why is he still trapped in his dreams.
Redafro: I don't know what went wrong, we should try go back.
*Redafro tries to use his powers to go back to Vortex head, but this time a dark force prevents him to do so*
Redafro: I just, I can't, a dark force its there preventing me to enter there, I think everything its at Vortex hands now.
Sublevel: "POOR VORTEX" :(

At Vortex's dreams

Vortex: Why your mom wants to see me?
Fine: Because you need her.
Vortex: Why I need her? I'm fine.
Fine: No, I'm Fine!
Vortex: You're fine?
Fine: My name is Fine!
Vortex: That your name is fine! Good that you like it, whats your name?
Fine: Fine!
Vortex: Oh what, Fine is your name! Who did put you that ugly name?
Fine: You said it was fine!
Vortex: Yes, your name is Fine!
Fine: Thanks!
Vortex: Ok -_o. And who put you that name?
Fine: My mom.
Vortex: Strage your mom, and where is her, we where all this time rounding trough the darkness, don't you know I want to awake!
Fine: I know, and my mom is right behind you.
Vortex: :o

Back at Submachine

Sublevel: What we can do now? Vortex its trapped forever.
Redafro: I'm not sure, Vortex head is corrupted by a dark force. How we can eliminate it?
Kakama: We need to call someone an expert in this kind of stuff.

1 hour later

Fear the Darkness: Yes, Vortex head is corrupted by a dark force coming from his nightmares, the unique way to save him is introducing someone with ghost capabilities.
Kakama: Who was this guy who invaded the resort when RomaH stole retraC's key?
Sublevel: Into the Void!
Redafro: Yep, we have to call him, its our last hope!

Back at Vortex's dreams

Vortex: Where I am?
Revefyadnus: You're now in Submuriben's house! Hahahahaha!
Vortex: Revefyadnus? What are you doing here?
Revefyadnus: I'm Fine's great sister! And we are Submuriben's daughters. We want to make you live the darkness for ever! Mwahahahaha!
Fine: Mom!
Submuriben: Yes baby!
Vortex: What the fuck are you?
Submuriben: I'm your worst nightmare, I'm Submuriben! Grandson of Sublevel, Murtaugh, Elizabeth and Bender!
Vortex: No! Not you abomination!
Submuriben: We will be one forever, and once we are one, we can awake to take the Subnet for ever.

Into the Void comes

Into the Void: Not so fast!
Vortex: Into the Void! Good to see you here!
Into the Void: I came to save you, take my hand!
Vortex: Goodbye bitch!
Submuriben: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

*Vortex awakes*

Sublevel: Finally!
kakama: :D
Redafro: Vortex is awake, how many time passed since was trapped there.
Kakama: It was there like 3 weeks.
Fear the Darkness: Wow!
Sublevel: Yes, poor Vortex, but he is with us now. :)
Vortex: Wow thanks dudes, withouth you help I couldn't get awaken by that silly Subception, I mean, Infinite Loopseption.
Into the Void: Good to see you well.
Kakama: I only hope Vortex can sleep well next time!
Sublevel: Yeah, how we know if Vortex has still problems?
Fear the Darkness: Well it seems that the dark force its no longer in Vortex head, so I think its gone.
Vortex: So it means that now I'm going to sleep well again? withouth loopseptions? :)
Redafro: Yep
Vortex: Yay! :D
Sublevel: Vortex, can you tell us what was happening there?
Vortex: Have you found a girl named Fine while you where searching me in my dreams?
Sublevel: Yep, how weird that was.
Vortex: Well, she trapped me and sent me with her mom.
Sublevel: Yeah, I remember that monster, good that the dream channel changed that time, who is her?
Vortex: I will only tell you, never marry Bender!
Sublevel: What? Why you say me that now? And you know I will never marry Bender, he is dirty!
Vortex: Well, I only hope!
Kakama: :?
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THE END

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 07:21
by The Kakama
*applauds*

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 09:39
by Vortex
Now I'm scared... just woke up from a really weird dream :/

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 09:41
by The Kakama
Looks like Enihcambus can see the future. :ugeek:

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 09:42
by Vortex
thankfully it had nothing to do with the scene XD but still the timing...

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 14:05
by The Abacus
@ENIHCAMBUS: Well done :)
ENIHCAMBUS wrote:Redafro: Vortex is awake, how many time happened since was trapped there.
Just for future reference: use "passed" instead of "happened" when referring to time (the verb to pass is used to imply movement or change, while the to happen is used more to refer to events). Also, "many" is used when referring to something that can be counted (e.g. people, cats, dogs, onions, trees), while "much" is used when referring to things that can be measured (e.g. time, cost, sleep, weight).

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 22:45
by ENIHCAMBUS
The Abacus wrote:Just for future reference: use "passed" instead of "happened" when referring to time (the verb to pass is used to imply movement or change, while the to happen is used more to refer to events).
Thanks, fixed!

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 05 Jun 2014 23:33
by Vortex
the mistakes I noticed were:

"How its posible" -> "How is it possible"
"everything its" -> "everything is"
"Who put you that name" -> "Who gave you that name"
"Strage" -> "Strange"
"we where all this time rounding trough" -> "we were all this time (hanging around?) through"
"call someone an expert" -> "call someone expert / an expert"
"live the darkness" -> "live in the darkness"
"It was there" -> "He was there" (unless it's intentional... ¬¬)
"the dark force its" -> "the dark force is"
"while you where" -> "while you were"
"Why you say me that" -> "Why do you tell me that"

they're all minor mistakes though, you can leave them if you want, just putting them here for information purposes.

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 06 Jun 2014 03:50
by ENIHCAMBUS
Dirty Love

Bender: Sublevel, I love you!
Sublevel: ¬¬
Bender: Kiss me please!
Sublevel: No Bender! My only love is Submachine!
Bender: Doesn't matter, you will be MINE Sublevel!

2 hours later

Vortex: Bender what are you doing?
Bender: I'm taking a bath, so I can meet Sublevel and say how I love him!
Vortex: But you're taking a bath with poop! :shock:
Bender: Sublevel will like me covered with poop.
Vortex: I'm sorry to say this, bur Sublevel prefers more higienical people!
Bender: Like you? I see what you want, you want to steal Sublevel! Sublevel will be MINE!
Vortex: No he will NEVER be yours!
Bender: Let Sublevel decide!
Vortex: Okay, but I must say Sublevel will prefer someone with my rate!
Bender: Nah! He will ENJOY MY RATE!!!

1 hour later

Bender: Sublevel, do you want to marry me?
Sublevel: Bender WTF, why you smell like that? Did you took another poop bath?
Bender: Yes, I made it for you!
Sublevel: Strange, weird, gross!
Vortex: Don't trust him, I'm more higienical, I'm using gloves now, take my Sublevel!
Sublevel: WTF!? NO!
Bender: What about me?
Sublevel: Neither you!
Bender and Vortex: So who is your love?
Sublevel: I know I repeated it lot of times, but I love to say that my only love is Submachine.
Bender: Thats gay!
Vortex: Definitively gay!
Sublevel: What? More gayer than xetroV?
xetroV: Yes, definitively more gayer than me! *Smokes*
Sublevel: Well, I don't care, I love Submachine, doesn't matter what do you think.
Bender and Vortex: :(
xetroV: I don't know whats the problem, I'm so gay that I love everyone in the evil side!
Vortex: Seriously?
xetroV: Yes, I had sex with everyone there, redneB, retraC, levelbuS, even Skutul!
Vortex: Wow!
Bender: Still, Sublevel loving Submachine is even more gayer!
xetroV: Yeah!
Vortex: XD


EPILOGUE:

xetroV: Hey Bender! What about if you, redneB, Rednoob, retraC and me go to have sex all while bathing in poop?
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Bender: I accept!

Re: Guardians of the Submachine: Cutscenes

Posted: 06 Jun 2014 03:55
by The Kakama
:o
:P