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Wait.... those commands aren't all copy-pasted? You've manually reworded them?
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Ancient Crystal wrote:Wait.... those commands aren't all copy-pasted? You've manually reworded them?
Dunno, sometimes Copy-Pasting errors (Extra spaces) tend to appear on his posts.
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No, judging from his edit, it appears the error was elouf missing a line, not the grammar. Which makes a lot more sense.
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The commands are all copy and pasted, words for words as best I can make them out to be.

The dialogues are all my works, which are to be edited if needed.

Like the formatting thing with Elouf's lines that's my faults.
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I think I just found something else at the bottom of page 15, or am I seeing things?
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COMMAND: ENER: DO IT AGAIN!

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[img]COMMAND:%20ENER:%20NOTE%20that%20your%20NEW%20FRIENDS%20have%20yet%20to%20come%20out.[/img]
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I see it too.
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The Abacus wrote:I think I just found something else at the bottom of page 15, or am I seeing things?
AK wrote:Azareus
COMMAND: ENER: DO IT AGAIN!

Anteroinen
[img]COMMAND:%20ENER:%20NOTE%20that%20your%20NEW%20FRIENDS%20have%20yet%20to%20come%20out.[/img]
FIXED!

You're not seeing things. It is due to using wrong style. Used [ img ] instead of [ list ] in that case. Thanks!
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Again a few minor errors:

On page 13 when Ener, Maddox and Kelen climb up the ventilation (somewhere between the top and middle of the page):
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COMMAND: Maddox: Go out to the LIGHT VOID and go near the cliff. Then try to look over the destroyed wall. Then, also, lie on the floor near the cliff, put your head upside down sticking out of the ground and try to look back. :mrgreen:
Sorry, but Maddox won't do that. It too long, too silly, and he already looks all over the place with Ener and they saw nothing. Better luck next time 8)

On page 19, right before Ener destroys the waterfall (currently in the middle of the page):
AK wrote:COMMAND: MADDOX: Closely EXAMINE frozen waterfall and check INVENTORY to see if anything can break/cut through it



Maddox won't go into the COLD ATMOSPHERE! He don't have the proper insulation against the extreme cold, so he lets Ener investigate instead.


Hmmmm...

Interesting, the waterfall is kinda transparent. Ener can see the other side of the FROZEN WATERFALL. He couldn't make out what it is...

And Maddox decided to look at the INVENTORY.
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Thanks for the head-up! Both had been fixed.

Let's see if I can finish posting Chapter 3 before I sleep.
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Hope you can. :)
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